“Blue Clouds”
looking at myself
just like Narcissus
in the pond
I notice
blue clouds
flowing past me
i raise my eyes
and get lost
out of the blue
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“Blue Clouds”
looking at myself
just like Narcissus
in the pond
I notice
blue clouds
flowing past me
i raise my eyes
and get lost
out of the blue
Beautiful poem! I read your description above and I can’t stop thinking about your thesis-impressive. Now to this lovely poem… I loved your use of simile…just like Narcissus in a pond (might I suggest “floating” in the pond…just to add further alliteration with next line?) Personification of the flower is great…I notice blue clouds flowing past me/and get lost/out of the blue…
Out of the blue or into the blue??? 🙂 Great poem and work!
A strong, image-driven poem. I love its simplicity, yet strong emotions about the clouds and getting lost “out of the blue” — suddenly! without reason.
Well done!