Sunset hues
creeping up
to palette the
evening sky.
The Sun
descends in
the distance.
A pandemonium
of parrots
perched high
among the
branches of
the almond tree
are camouflaged
with the
color of leaves.
The sun sets:
it’s time
for them
to fly back
to their nests.
While the branches
of the palm tree
are almost
knocking for
permission to
come in
from the window,
they sway
in the gentle
caress of the
wind’s tickle.
j.r.m©
I enjoy the movement that draws me from the sky to trees, then from general trees into a specific one, and so on my mind’s eye keeps noting details (branches of an almond tree, nests, knocking palm fronds, and so on). It may be pandemonium, but it’s lively and fun. The ending soft breeze is a lovely end. Quite a gentle, lovely poem.
I’m blessed with this view from my window <3 thank you. 🙂
I like the hint of alliteration throughout your poem, but its never quite that organized, like the view that is painted for me here. And parrots! Wow! That sounds so exotic to me. You’ve really captured something wonderful in words here.
thank you @teriharroun 🙂 I’M BLESSED
This is a fun poem. For editing, look at the punctuation and capitalization. You have sentences that are not marked as such, a.nd capitals in the middle of sentences. In the guidelines we are asked not to strart a line with a capital arbitrarily
Thank you for your kind assistance 🙂
@paulrobertsanford I have applied the changes. 🙂
It looks very good. I’m not sure about the colon instead of a period, butit seems like a good choice. This one seems ready to submit.