Love it! The title alone conveys victory, and isn’t the poetry marathon itself a symbol so many other things in life? “Restlessness” contrasting with “snuggle cozily” makes me think about the many different jolts and challenges we think. There’s the draw and drain of restless energy, and this poem is full of energy. I’m looking forward to reading your other poems.

I enjoy the movement that draws me from the sky to trees, then from general trees into a specific one, and so on my mind’s eye keeps noting details (branches of an almond tree, nests, knocking palm fronds, and so on). It may be pandemonium, but it’s lively and fun. The ending soft breeze is a lovely end. Quite a gentle, lovely poem.

I like the hint of alliteration throughout your poem, but its never quite that organized, like the view that is painted for me here. And parrots! Wow! That sounds so exotic to me. You’ve really captured something wonderful in words here.

This is a fun poem. For editing, look at the punctuation and capitalization. You have sentences that are not marked as such, a.nd capitals in the middle of sentences. In the guidelines we are asked not to strart a line with a capital arbitrarily

It looks very good. I’m not sure about the colon instead of a period, butit seems like a good choice. This one seems ready to submit.

Lovely poem. I have only two comments. First, I think you rely too heavily on having a picture carry your poem. This poem tells about a cloud mountain, but you don’t actually feel anything or see any images of a cloud mountain unless you look at the picture. That isn’t poetry. The poem should stand alone and convey the visuals. The image (if you use one) should emphasize the poem, not the other way around.

Secondly, and I would say this to every modern poet or lyricist, not just you. Any time you have to resort to slurs, foul language or swearing, your vocabulary is too small. Find another way to express the feeling in descriptive words, without the coarse language. You can do it! 🙂 “In mid air and gravity can’t wrap it’s head around it” or “In mid air and gravity can’t bring you down.” Something like that.