@rosemars
active 9 months, 3 weeks ago-
rosemars commented on the post, Hour 19: Siphonophore Apolemia 10 months, 2 weeks ago
Thank you for this awesome and thoughtful feed back!!!
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rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 24: Baby Boy 10 months, 2 weeks ago
You lived inside our mother, first.
That changed everything, I’d thought
but once you were here
once your laugh was real
The birthmark on your hand
your soft forehead on my shoulder
The intoxicating smell of […] -
rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 23: Invisible Friend 10 months, 2 weeks ago
I wanted an imaginary friend.
I tried to make or find one.
He may be invisible, but I would have it.He never came.
Wanting, it turns out, is not enough.
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rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 22: City Lines 10 months, 2 weeks ago
Geometry is all about history
the crane speaks of recreation,
re-imagination, annihilation.
Palm reader, complimentary
angles of criss-crossed lines,
of life lines.
A window washer crosses the […]-
I think the juxtaposition between palm lines and city lines is absolutely brilliant!
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rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 21: Sleep 10 months, 2 weeks ago
My illusive friend,
you torment with with your absence.
I long for you to smother me
return every night and find me waiting
sink in to my bones, and don’t let go. -
rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 20: The Little Match Girl 10 months, 2 weeks ago
Ragged child holds a match close to her chest
when it blinks out she lights another
each match is warmer, she is sure
there in the light the match girl sees
all the help she needs
so she follows the outreaching hand -
rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 19: Siphonophore Apolemia 10 months, 2 weeks ago
We are tendrils in the blue ether
a hairy water dragon of war
behold our enterprising hive mind
colonial, attractive to the eye
Observe us, we watch you back, in silence
Maneuvering, positioning
Forget what […]-
I’m impressed. Maybe because this prompt gave me a great deal of trouble. But you seem to have grabbed hold and tamed it.
I like the imagery, especially the “water dragon of war” line.
I find “colonial” confusing and “attractive to the eye” doesn’t say enough. Maybe expand on these details? Are you thinking of the creature as a colony or a colonizer? What is it colonizing? What, besides the obvious things we see which you’ve already described, make it attractive? I think of attraction as more emotional than physical. What emotion is evoked?
I love love love your last line! Did you mean to say “wonder” or did you mistype “wander”? Whatever your intent, don’t change what’s there please. “Wonder” gives that line greater depth.
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Thank you for this awesome and thoughtful feed back!!!
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rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 19: Childrens' New Year 10 months, 2 weeks ago
The kids catch the tail-end of the holiday films
While parents tidy away the odds and ends,
choose their best jeans and fix their hair.
The new toys are now up in the bedrooms.
A pink glow from the tree shines […] -
rosemars commented on the post, Prompt 17: Mixed Tape 10 months, 2 weeks ago
Love live tape! I love a mixed tape. Great topic choice.
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rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 17: My Brother's Phonograph 10 months, 2 weeks ago
My brother rambled about going back to therapy –
things my mother wanted to hear.
Then excitedly moved on to other topics,
maybe a job at the second-hand store,
and something else he’d found there.
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rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 16: Trying 10 months, 2 weeks ago
If I choose to meet the current
I am no longer one, alone.
Instead, two galaxies mingle
drawn by a mounting gravity neither can control.
This is inevitable,
though I don’t believe in fate.
Meet me at my […] -
rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 15: Flight 2296 10 months, 2 weeks ago
You wouldn’t have noticed, but
I flew over you
probably dressing yourself
or thinking about work
and making tea
in your narrow kitchen.
Thinking of you I looked up
And there was the moon
blemish free
and […] -
rosemars commented on the post, 14 Those Who Take Care 10 months, 2 weeks ago
Your initial and ending lines compliment each other so well. Very skillful way to bookend a poem.
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rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 14: "Those who take care of us" 10 months, 2 weeks ago
The Mother and her songs
rise through the dirt
red heads who light the wayThe Mother and her songs
collaborate on a garden
and a deep drumming heartbeatThe Mother and her songs
talk to the sky and […] -
rosemars commented on the post, Hour 13; Prompt 13: Check the Levels 10 months, 2 weeks ago
This is a great poem about something I would never think of writing about. You really captured the physical stickiness of mowing the lawn. I love it!
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rosemars commented on the post, Gardening 10 months, 2 weeks ago
I love the first line!!!
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rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 13: All the gifts in the trees 10 months, 2 weeks ago
Each time I pace this route
I see new offerings
3 doves, the gloss of the holly
if there is a time to feel mortal, it is now.all the plums are forming, an altar under a tree
a bottle hangs on a branch
We […] -
rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 12: Steel, As You Probably Know 10 months, 2 weeks ago
I am made of steel
made of nails and invincible.
Keep going.Stop and I will find
as you probably know
I am an alloy based in ironProne to rust and decay
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rosemars wrote a new post, Hour 11: Hollywood 10 months, 2 weeks ago
Hey Hollywood, way out west
golden highway, you hot mess
have I missed your glam, your impersonators?
glitter like a tranny golden apple?I want to know your drag, your yellow bricks
I want to know your […]-
I love this poem – the double-meanings, the word choices, and how I connected with it!! Brilliant!
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