Powerful images and message here! I love the refrain.

Beautiful rhythm to this poem!

I love the theme and images in this piece. Beautiful!

Love these last two stanzas:
“the ember burning
in my throat that has been there

that has refused
to cool to ash”

Love these images. Seems like a magical place. Especially liked this line:
“Light breeze giving the leaves something to whisper about”
Made me think there is some secret hidden in this place.

Love the movement of this piece. I feel like I am following the drizzling raindrops path. Beautiful images!

The tone of this piece is so bleak but so spot on! I really enjoyed this poem because it captures our world’s ailments so well.

This last stanza is amazing!
“spit the gasoline to the sky
until the sun sublimates the tar
while they pinch our pennies so tight
they collapse into a star”

Your last line: “That’s what internal bleeding feels like” — really packs a punch. It is so true too!

Love, love, love this poem! The message/theme is so powerful. I am a teacher of middle school students and this is the type of poem I would love to share with them.

Love the hope which exudes from this poem. Your imagery —
“A mist spreads over the base of the falls./Ethereal in quality, but tangible in spirit/Roaring with the vigor of the very wind itself” — really captures the essence of the photo well.

I really enjoyed the evolution of this poem and the analogy to the white rose. Your last stanza was amazing.

This poem is so beautiful! I cried. I love the theme of unconditional love, and I understand the fear you feel as well.
These lines really touched me:
For outer looks fade fast
Trust the souls who choose to voice
Their peace within at last
These are the mantras of my strength
My hour 7 Prompt: “In this Season” deals with a similar theme.

Wow! The feelings of loneliness and invisibility in this poem are profound. I have had moments in my life when I have felt this life as well.
We all need to be seen and heard and sometimes our voices just don’t seem loud enough. Poetry is such a great vehicle for expressing these feelings. Well done!

I enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme of this poem.
Love these lines:
“your hand inside mine/our bodies, entangled vines/love growing with time/like sweet aged wine.” They capture the feeling of wholeness one experiences when they have found love. Well done.

I get it! Love the allusion to Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde. Love the voice you have created for Hyde. I love that Hyde doesn’t take himself too seriously.
Great poem.

I would have liked your Aunt Maybelle. She sounds like quite a character. I enjoyed the vivid picture you painted of her and her activism. Especially loved your twist on the apple and tree:
apples, they are
from a distant branch of a tree
that won’t let them fall
too far away

I love the analogy of the spider’s climb to ambition. Great last line!

Wow! Your lines “black milk of Auschwitz” —
A poignant reminder of our stark past.

Your opening lines are really powerful — that need to have Faye back is so authentic. I feel your sadness and relate to the longing you feel to hear the words of someone who is no longer with you. Beautiful poem.

Beautiful imagery! My favorite lines:
“A pit dug in between two lovers to punctuate their communion”