2 thoughts on “Hour 11: By the River Mara

  1. Wow…this took my breath away! So outstanding!

    Might I make one small edit suggestion…
    “…is like to die twice” (“like” breaks the flow for me. Perhaps experiment with taking out that one word. For me, at least, that one change turns an already electric poem into a thunderstorm)

    Your poem made me pause and just soak it up. Well done!

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