There is only one moment
on any given day when
the carnage of life
just fades away
it’s that slide
into sleep
that place
between
dreams
and
death.
24 Poems ~ 24 Hours
There is only one moment
on any given day when
the carnage of life
just fades away
it’s that slide
into sleep
that place
between
dreams
and
death.
I like the composition of the poem, how it narrows to the bottom and reminds me how vision narrows to blackness when you close your eyes to sleep. Maybe in revision you can make it narrow more gradually to guide the eye?
Your comment is like a whole new poem 🙂