I look out of my window
It’s near sunset
The sky coloured with
Different hues of blue and orange
With just a hint of black.
The day seems to be turning in
To go to sleep
In the comfort of night
But let me just stay for a while
As I write one last time.
One last time, let my emotions flow
Let my scars be revealed in light
Let my happiness reach you
Let me cry through verses
One last time.
Let my gratitude overflow
As my tears find solace in words
Let my feelings reach you
As I bare my soul
One last time….
Let me stay up for just a while
As I write one last time.
Powerful! I have seen so many about the fatigue, and I’m certain you felt this (there are hints) but the energy of your writing is strong here. The pattern of your ideas — moving from description of place to yearnings to potential interaction with us readers — is effective. This is strong, deft, and engaging. Congratulations!
Thank you 🙂
This is such an amazing write! It has energy and vivacity…movement of words and rhythm is nice. The sky colored with Different hues of blue and orange
With just a hint of black.Let me cry through verses
One last time. (y)
Keep writing. 🙂
Thank you 🙂
I hope you keep writing many more times, Bhasha, well written.
Thank you, ma’am 🙂
I am thinking of sending this one for the anthology but wanted to make a slight change in the last line.
Would it sound better if I replace ‘write’ with ‘live’ in the last line? So it becomes, ‘let me stay up for a while, as i live one last time.’
Please tell your thoughts on this.