Feathery melodies before old flappy Sun alights
Then ten origami cranes folded tiny as a doll’s teacup
Then coffee poured from a nested cone filter
(There it is – those birds again)
Everything after is afterthought
A petty feather wafting to a paltry floor
This is stunning. You’ve packed so much into these lines, in such a graceful way. The effect is dazzling.
This is amazing. So sparse and compact, so compelling.
Elegant poem, lovely!
Yes! Evocative and compelling!