Forever Bound (Hour Four, A Hall of Mirrors Hay(na)ku)

Forever Bound

Grief

is like

a rusty chain

wrapped tightly ’round

a tree

trunk,

slowly

sinking deeper

into the wood,

weighing heavy on

our hearts,

suffocating,

stealing

the light

from our eyes

and the oxygen

from our

lungs,

until

one day

we awake, only

to discover we

can breathe

again,

for

the chain

has grown to

become a permanent

part of

us.

 

(A hay(na)ku is a three line poem where the only rule is that the first line is made up of one word, the second line of two words, and the third line of three words. A reverse hay(na)ku is a three line poem composed in the opposite manner, so line one would be three words, line two is two words, and line three would be just one word. During the 2019 Poetry Marathon, I combined these two styles to create what I called the “mirror hay(na)ku”. This time, I have taken things a step further with the “Hall of Mirrors Hay(na)ku”, which is composed of five separate mirror hay(na)ku stanzas.)

3 thoughts on “Forever Bound (Hour Four, A Hall of Mirrors Hay(na)ku)

    1. I’m glad you enjoyed this and my explanation of my mismatched made up format made sense! I actually took this concept from a conversation with an old friend several years ago shortly after her mother had passed. My late husband had passed a couple years previous, and I was still struggling myself. I came up with the chain and the tree explanation and it has just resonated with me ever since. This was the first time I actually expanded the idea, so it’s good to know it came across clearly.

  1. Speaking of condensed poetic forms to contain grief and loss … are you familiar with The Minute? Cathy Bowers created it to write about her loss after her brother died. If you like brevity/conciseness, you should check it out! Her sample poem, “The Year I Got No Valentines” showcases the form.

    3 quatrains (or 4-line stanzas)
    8 syllables in the first line of each stanza
    4 syllables in the remaining lines of each stanza
    rhyme scheme: aabb/ccdd/eeff
    written in strict iambic meter
    So each stanza contains 20 syllables times 3 stanzas equals 60 syllables total.

    Try it out – I think you’ll enjoy it!

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