Two couplets organized in a quatrain each line having 5 or 8 syllables.
Holding on to me too tightly
Having you cling to me closely
Hoping you would let me breathe
Helping you not to tightly squeeze
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Two couplets organized in a quatrain each line having 5 or 8 syllables.
Holding on to me too tightly
Having you cling to me closely
Hoping you would let me breathe
Helping you not to tightly squeeze
I like these two couplets. I especially like the beginning of each line. The picture is clear of a close relationship.
Thank you Karen. Glad you liked this piece.
Oliver
Well written and as the person above said the start of each line is catchy and makes for a good rhythm. Also, thank you for teaching me a new form… This is my first time seeing it and I can’t wait to try it as well!
Thank you Bhasha. Glad you liked this Jueju. This was my first one I have every written and it was fun. HOpe you get a chance to write one as well/