it’s always cold inside these glass walls
the same scenery and no warmth
earthquakes shake me up
every now and then
no place to go
nowhere to hide
though I have been waiting
all this time, it’s been
the same silence and the cold
it’s always the same inside these glass walls
the same scenery and no warmth.
I do like this one. I might adjust the first line (and when it circles back at the end) to fix the rhythm a bit, maybe delete the word “these”?
I might also change “I have been waiting” to contract to “I’ve” but maybe not. Spelling it out stretches out the line and gives a bit of the sense of waiting. Maybe move the following line up to join it to give that same sense?
Remember: it’s your poem. Don’t change anything you don’t want to change.