gone with the wind
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she appreciates the concrete –
terra firma beneath her feet
the fir-lined horizon
a welcome sight
after so long at sea –
a wandering bark
blue on blue
for months on end
(interrupted only by a hush
of whispers in the fog)
no place to dock
until today – now she stands
coffee and a moonbeam
in hand, the canteen
teeming with fishermen
buying tackle and bait
but they’ll have to wait,
put their advances on the shelf
with her coffee cup –
only the wind at her back
(that damn sea-spray
calling her by name)
only the wind at her back
– always leaving
This is a really good poem! Erasure poems can be very disjointed, but yours flows nicely I think. It all worked together for me at least 🙂
Thanks, rainmaker! This was the prompt where we had to use at least five of the ten words – being a regular participant in the CV -2 2-day poem contest, I found it fairly easy to use all ten!! Practice helps! Glad you enjoyed it and thanks again! Good luck as you continue on tonight!
Lovely. Very evocative. Nice job!
Thanks, viviak!!! 🙂
Great imagery! Nicely done
Cristy, I love these ‘common prompt’ poems as I like to call them … where everyone writes to the same thing. Have you seen the variety in stories, arrangements of words, ideas … Some favorite lines from yours that stood out to me as so different from many others:
‘she appreciates the concrete –
terra firma beneath her feet’;
‘ a hush
of whispers in the fog’;
and the repeating line ‘only the wind at her back… always leaving.’
You are a natural story-teller, I can see. Thank you!
Thank you, again Sarah! This one is continuing to resonate with me, so I may even use at as one of my two. Need to read and comment on others before I choose mine, but I do enjoy seeing the journeys people take these words on!! If you haven’t done the CV2-2-day poem contest before, consider it for next year (10 words and 48 hours to create a poem)! It is loads of fun, too! 🙂
Thanks, Katelyn! I am sorry I am so late in replying but as soon as school ended last Thursday I had to drive to California for a funeral. Just got home. Will begin commenting on others today and tomorrow!! 🙂