season of the bohemian waxwing
when i tipped my feathers with red,
and floundered in the forest of yellow cedars
stood shakily on the branches of the blackberry
bush, intoxicated with fermented fruit
thinking i had found a spruce for building
my nest and mating
but a winter of snow meant
road salt in the spring water
that turned my insides bitter
and left me without young
for years to come
What an unexpected and tender turn at the end. Lovely imagery. Beautifully constructed. Great to read you again!! Thank you
Thank you, Sarah!! Hope you are doing well? The marathon – and being immersed in poetry for the day – was soul-soothing!
You made such a point in the powerful way of poetry. Condensing a message down to a few lines often reaches more folks than a report of several pages. Thank you for writing such a fine poem. ☺
Thank you, Nancy Ann! I appreciate your feedback!! I agree that part of the ‘pull of poetry’ is when we can glean meaning from a few words – I am glad that you feel I was able to achieve that with this poem! 🙂
Wonderful use of color to enhance this poem, vivid and concise. Emotional, the barren end with the purity of white snow and bitter salt. Thank you!
Thank you, jrturek!! I am thrilled that this poem worked and appreciate your feedback! I was totally going for that kind of ending…
I love this one, Cristy, and would love to give a shout out to this poem on the FB page. I’d like to tag you however, and I am not able to find you on the member page.
Thank you, Skay!! I don’t know how I missed the 2020 facebook page? I could have sworn I posted on it? Ha ha! I have just submitted my request to join! Will keep you posted and thank you for this wonderful shout-out!!
Thanks again, Skay – finally sorted it all out and I am on the FACEBOOK 2020 Poetry Marathon page – yeah!!! I am happy to reciprocate, if you are still keen on tagging my post? I have very few comments on my poems thus far and would love to get a better sense of which ones to choose for my two! I so appreciate the time you have taken to comment on my poems and the work of others! 🙂