4pm. Poem 14
What is Love? (Redacted)
Love is a list (redacted).
Love is my children
and grandchildren,
my Lucy Watusi Kitty,
all the bills paid,
and a little (redacted) over.
Love is gratitude
and (redacted) cross legged
on my big, old, soft bed.
Love is (redacted)!
All my (redacted)!
All the (redacted)!
Love is guiltless
personal (redacted)
really good dark chocolate
orange toenail color
feral chickens (redacted)
right outside my bedroom window.
Love is
the gurgle speak of Iao Stream
chit chatting down to the ocean.
Love is autonomy
and nonjudgment
and cherry chapstick…
but, that doesn’t make much (redacted).
All these things are things I love
not what love is.
So, what is love?
Love is letting things and beings
be who and what they are as long as they aren’t hurting anyone else in their process…
Yeah, that’s what love is.
Not very poetic, though.
Let’s try again…
Love is the ache
in my ancient (redacted)
for crows and trains
and Mom and Dad.
Love is
the desparate hollow of my arms
where my grandbabies slept before the blast and splatter.
Love is (redacted)
that I will know those things
again someday.
Love is (redacted).
Yeah… love is (redacted).
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Grrrrrrr! You’re too clever! Redacting a poem you’ve already written. So so clever. Why didn’t I think of think?? Instead of writing a whole new one. Then redacting that! I ca only argue sleep deprivation. Though I am pleased with how mine came out. But I’m still super impressed by yours.
Oh wow !!! me again!! Now I’ve read the original too! How could you redact your books. THREE TIMES TOO!!! I’m really hard pressed to know which I prefer. I like the original for sure. but there’s such an element of danger & mystery in the redacted version.
Do you have a preference? I say again. well well done 🙂
Hahaha not clever at all. I could not pull a poem out of me, so I used one I had already posted. I don’t even know if it qualifies, but it’s a poem I wrote, and it is redacted. Hope so 🤞
Mahalo for the comment!
I know, right? I struggled with redacting books, but the more I resisted, the more I knew it had to be done 😄
it absolutely counts & despite what you say I think it should count *twice* cos IT IS CLEVER intentional or otherwise (I haven’t yet seen anyone else do & I’ve been hunting out redacted poems cos I’m really enjoying them) … I’ve played with them previously