she wore an orange silk camisole underneath her cotton blouse
making every breeze more interesting to those who stood over her
while she rode the bus from fayette to montford
and it had never dawned on her that anyone would even desire a peek
much less stare with bold eye or quick glance;
and the daisy dukes revealed the orange lace tap pants underneath.
she did it all so effortlessly that she sometimes forgot to be coy
and men would whistle and yell out to her-
but she’d never pause to acknowledge the attention-
walking in her sheer cotton blouse and daisy dukes
she felt like a girl again
and didn’t want to think about the water bill she had
left on the dresser
or the dead beat dad who came by once in a while-
here and now
she was independent and spontaneous-
unrestrained and immune to the world around her-
ripe like a tangerine.
This is great, you paint a solid picture of this woman.
To me, this moment in the poem is what startles me (in a wonderful way):
“and didn’t want to think about the water bill she had / left on the dresser / or the dead beat dad who came by once in a while-”
It is such an emotionally compelling turn in the poem. Brava!