Anshu Sikchi

  • Anshu Sikchi commented on the post, 10 months, 3 weeks ago

    Thank you so for the feedback!!
    Yes that is a very good suggestion. I guess at that hour I could’ve hardly thought of anything better!

  • Tysm for the feedback…
    Well for the 1st line, i tried to convey tha she was naive; like she could easily become a puppet if other peoples views and words; but she did have courage inside ( which is understood by reading the next stanza) .

    And yes, i could have been interesting to end the way you said!!
    I jus meant to convey that inside…[Read more]

  • Thank you so much!

  • Anshu Sikchi commented on the post, She 10 months, 3 weeks ago

    Last 4 lines mean..

    She had her own ways of doing things.. which were strange for people..,,
    She just went with the flow.. (never planned anything .. hardly had a goal to achieve, didn’t have anywhere to reach) and so, she was successful but late!

  • Her thoughts were, at times, volatile
    Although he knew her for a while
    To him, she appeared sublime
    And thought of her thoughts as a chime

    Fallen for her smile
    He wished; for him, she walk down the […]

  • 1.
    After a dark night,
    There’s a surmise.
    Although the moon is bright
    And the stars infinite,
    With the darkness I fight.

    2.
    After a hug tight,
    There’s a surprise.
    Although the kiss is just rig […]

  • Lush green fields
    Swaying with the cool breeze
    With sun shining bright
    Like gold it shines

    But does the sunshine spread evenly everywhere?
    I doubt!
    And so, rely on the technology
    These robo@fields do an […]

  • Although living in a cage,
    I am a bird; flying in my dreams.
    Mine is a story untold;
    I wish I was enough bold!

    In the question marks I believed,
    And in the doubts, I often dived.
    I imagined to come out of […]

  • Your words now have an insidious effect on me
    Tedious arguments breaking my heart
    Oh, do not ask, “What is it?”
    Coz I know you do not give a damn shit

    You say
    “There will be time, there will be time”
    But […]

  • A bunch full of flowers in the hands
    Colorful and beautiful
    Flow out to spread fragrance
    In the house

    A bunch full of thoughts in the mind
    Wise and wonderful
    Flow out to spread brilliance
    In the […]

    • Nice simple structure
      Lovely sentiments
      Though I’m wondering whether there’s a fraction too much repetition in such a short poem.

      8 *full sounds in 12 lines

      “A bunch of flowers” is stronger than “A bunch full of flowers”

      Also for verse 2&3 could you use poesy & bouquet (or other words) just to give line more variety & colour

      & finally instead of “flow” each verse could the word connect to the subject — ie “pump out to spread oneness” (or “beat” or “pulse” or something other word connected to blood/the heart)

      Hope this helps

      • Thank you so for the feedback!!
        Yes that is a very good suggestion. I guess at that hour I could’ve hardly thought of anything better!

  • I know I drive you crazy,
    You too, sometimes are fussy…
    To me, you still are my li’l baby

    You know we both are choosy,
    Cheer up and take it easy..
    I am sorry, I say frankly!!
    So do mummy and daddy!

    No […]

  • With the tantrums she threw,
    Why really, nobody knew.
    When all that she had,
    She was about to lose.
    But every single time,
    Love came to her Rescue.

    With all that she knew,
    She never really grew.
    With all […]

  • Have a crazy bunch of people around me
    Who care for me in every special way!!

    Feels just yesterday, we started off together on the path,
    Who knew, we would be as we are today!

    I look back..
    Years gone by, […]

  • Ruled by the others she was till date,
    Serene and innocent.
    A damsel indeed;
    Attempting to prevent apocalypse,
    With a smile on her face.

    But she was made to write her own fate
    Growing in the shadow of the […]

    • This is good (though I must admit I don’t quite understand the first line)

      However I’d suggest a tweak to the last line — invisible angel wings yes that’s nice

      But flipping the last line for the devil

      From
      With invisible horns and tail
      To
      With visible horns and tail

      Gives the last line a real kick & shows you’re* a strong woman not to be messed with 🙂

      * you or the character in this poem

      • Tysm for the feedback…
        Well for the 1st line, i tried to convey tha she was naive; like she could easily become a puppet if other peoples views and words; but she did have courage inside ( which is understood by reading the next stanza) .

        And yes, i could have been interesting to end the way you said!!
        I jus meant to convey that inside was dangerous as a devil at the same time sweet as an angel. But ofcourse , was a normal girl.. who had both the QUALITIES, which are there inside each person…

  • Take me to the land
    Where you reside
    Hold me by my hand
    Where you’re by my side
    I want to hide
    In your arms
    Inside

    But do not worry for me at any cost..
    My love! the land knows you, even when you are […]

  • Pour down your thoughts;
    Don’t vomit them out!
    Let them flow out of you..
    Then
    Give them a direction..
    You will witness a beautiful river flowing;
    A river, full of thoughts!!

  • does it have to be a single word or it can be a couple of them?

  • I’m on an adventure
    Diving into my heart
    Where I will find the treasure
    But first I must find
    The map, my inspiration
    Perhaps I could look to my love
    For it brings me elation
    Teaching me the new […]

  • Dear Anshu,
    2001,

    Life is a box full of Surprises
    Every moment is a Present
    You gotto open it with a Smile
    Embrace even the Fragile
    Walk another Mile
    Define your own Style
    And Never settle in being just Fine

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