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cinwhit commented on the post, Prompt 25/H20-Pulling from a love song 1 year, 6 months ago
The ending with cheque, banked and bankrupt gives this piece a grand force…the questions only hint at!! I d love to see this in the anthology this year! Consider it!
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cinwhit commented on the post, Tale of Childhood 1 year, 6 months ago
The first two lines begin on a roll..what I like is that the rhyming is fluid in your piece. Unhurried and honest. Well done!!
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cinwhit commented on the post, Prompt 29/H23-4-12 1 year, 6 months ago
At each stage I heard like a different melody in my mind because of your transparency. Excellent story telling properties.
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cinwhit commented on the post, Hour 23: Reality 1 year, 6 months ago
Mother nature can keep us all humble. Your poem packs a punch about our helplessness in the face of devastation. Nicely done!
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cinwhit commented on the post, Lost and Found, Hour 23 1 year, 6 months ago
Evokes emotion. The flyers. Happy ending. That this was written early morning is not lost on me!! Wow!
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cinwhit commented on the post, Twisted Truths 1 year, 6 months ago
You had me at he moves on… and in the papertrail. Oh goodness, I see and hear what I can only display behind my eyes. Tears and pain. Maybe I m still living with deep regret. Like 40 years of letting THE one get away. DAMN!
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cinwhit commented on the post, Rage Against the Hopeless Romantic 1 year, 6 months ago
I ll court her tonight…a solution that is also a hot mess in the making! I gave my own ending a second or two and chuckled. I ve done a lot of things for a good night’s sleep in my day. Some i totally regret. And I still long for that deep sleep state. Well done marathoner!
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cinwhit commented on the post, Youth No More 1 year, 6 months ago
The list of what you like to do adds a spot check of what living life fully looks like * growing old has its own perks!! This poem works!!
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cinwhit commented on the post, 19~24 1 year, 6 months ago
What memories your poem brings!! Like an old tv ad for a collection at 3am, the playlist is totally running thru my mind and I m singing.
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cinwhit commented on the post, (Hour 22) 1 year, 6 months ago
The malady of the cell phone pic. It was more than the yogurt container; that we as earth caregivers have failed. I read other poems from your marathon and I like the raw edge evident in your work. I hope you consider submission to the anthology!
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cinwhit commented on the post, Hour 24. (2019) 1 year, 6 months ago
I like your song choice. You give love a bad name. . . Screaming!! Jon.bon.Jovi. the power. The actor. The musician. That one line gives way to the drama of life!! Congrats!
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cinwhit commented on the post, Eany Meany – Men of Means 1 year, 6 months ago
This poem has layers… Means as money & power and just plain mean. The … as swords reminds me of the me2 movement and how awkward my men friends were in retelling some of their stories. There was an innocent piece, but many had been the worst kind of casting couch slum. These were men I knew and cared for. Loved. It became easier to see how…[Read more]
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cinwhit commented on the post, Monsoon Comes 1 year, 6 months ago
Clouds are no longer lonely. I just stayed with this vulnerable piece drawing in energy. Storms where I live often leave the air clean and the ground wet without a devastating wake. I m inspired to write about internal storms this morning. Thank you!
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cinwhit commented on the post, All the Little Lies 1 year, 6 months ago
The images of shells. forgotten. People. There’s a depth in how you wrote this poem.
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cinwhit commented on the post, Choices 1 year, 6 months ago
Unchangeable. That word caught my eye and my heart remembers making wrong moves…
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cinwhit commented on the post, Unicorn's Pride 1 year, 6 months ago
This could be a gamers intro… so much action!! The white unicorn waits reminds me of knight on a white horse. Inspiring
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cinwhit commented on the post, Tall Cats Are Terrible Hunters (2019 Poem 21) 1 year, 6 months ago
This made me smile…afraid of a moth you say… that’s totally adorable!! I like the title because it makes me wonder what was brought in for dinner??
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cinwhit commented on the post, In the city 1 year, 6 months ago
Concrete holds secrets it never tells you… vivid and direct. I also like the title, too.
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cinwhit commented on the post, Dear Me 1 year, 6 months ago
I recognize the description, seeing myself sitting right there, and yet your words sound hopeful and mature. I like this for the anthology.. .
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cinwhit commented on the post, Diamante: Nature/Technology 1 year, 6 months ago
Your poem navigates further than the written words… your courage and strength remains! Congrats on this tech piece! Hope it makes it into the anthology! !
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