@joyceb
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JoyceB commented on the post, Prompt 11 and Poem #11 "My Brand New World" by Ingrid Exner, Half-Marathon, 2020 1 week, 2 days ago
The journey of your poem touches on how we’d like to see the world. Sadly this feels like a dream. I like how you touched on the subject
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JoyceB commented on the post, 23- Mine 1 week, 2 days ago
I love this poem. Sometimes we need to shut the door and get into our writing mind and let the words spill out. This is the perfect time for this.
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JoyceB commented on the post, #12 grab a book, read the first line and read the last line, choose one 1 week, 2 days ago
Thank you
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JoyceB commented on the post, Pandemic 1 week, 2 days ago
It seems like every movement we make needs to be sanitized. Door knobs, elevator buttons and any other surface we never thought about touching or not. I like how you take us through each step as if to remind us, don’t touch or wash and sanitize if you do. Normal daily activities become a chore.
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JoyceB commented on the post, prompt 24 1 week, 6 days ago
I like your view of art, born into souls to share, colors, cooking, travel. All of this helps us create who we are or want to be.
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JoyceB commented on the post, Life of Stacy my imaginary Friend (Poem #23) 1 week, 6 days ago
We all need a friend like Stacy. Sounds like the kind of person to tell secrets to knowing they go nowhere, she’s too busy being kind.
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JoyceB commented on the post, The Marble 1 week, 6 days ago
Oh, the wonders of a child’s mind. A marble as a treasure, carried everywhere and even introduced to everyone- so sweet. The stories this marble could tell. Love it!
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JoyceB commented on the post, The Gift of Idea. 1 week, 6 days ago
I like how you describe this present. It’s not wrapped or in a box. Words. Ideas. What a wonderful gift that can continue to give.
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JoyceB commented on the post, Poem #10 1 week, 6 days ago
Nice writing. You kept me hanging on for more information that never came but I was enticed enough to read on. The eternity of 10 seconds and your brain exploding leaving empty space, words well chosen and at last he thinks, you may be tired at 11:57 pm
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JoyceB commented on the post, #10 Listen to Moon Shadow 2 weeks, 1 day ago
Thank you Anne. The prompts spoke to me this year.
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JoyceB wrote a new post, #2 My recipe for happiness 2 weeks, 2 days ago
5 ingredients are:
quiet time, to reflect
time together, unity
reflection, for what could have happened but didn’t, so it’s good
time to listen,shows I care
time to take action, in some way.
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JoyceB wrote a new post, #1 Write a poem about a famous woman or an influential woman you know personally 2 weeks, 2 days ago
I thought I posted this yesterday but cannot find it so here it is
Mom-
influential to me
and many more I was unaware of
She is gone now, May 1
Tributes and memories have filled
my FB […]
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JoyceB wrote a new post, #12 grab a book, read the first line and read the last line, choose one 2 weeks, 2 days ago
It took me a long time to be comfortable where I am
Without you I’m lost
with you I’m not
I’d rather be
together
forever.
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This is a beautiful poem Joyce! It is short but I think there is great beauty in its brevity. It also seems to have a shape to it and set pattern so, I won’t talk about adding different syntax or moving words. However. The word Forever calls for capitalization…what do you think? I also might add a few hyphens as this poem seems speedy? Just my two cents! I love this poem! Great work!
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Thank you
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Joyce, this punches so hard. It’s beautiful, poignant and deeply moving. I love the way you’ve shaped the poem, running without punctuation as the words grow shorter and shorter. I love it just the way it is here – no changes, no editing. It’s just beautiful.
To be honest, I really don’t want to over-analyse it, because this is so heavy with grief. It reminds me of how I felt when I lost my mum – and I’m so sorry for your loss xx
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JoyceB wrote a new post, #11 a poem about a place I've never been to 2 weeks, 2 days ago
The end of a rainbow
somewhere there is a pot of gold
at the end of the rainbow they say
I’ve searched and searched
found nothing
I can see the rainbow ends here
no pot of gold anywhere.
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JoyceB wrote a new post, #10 Listen to Moon Shadow 2 weeks, 2 days ago
Persistence
if I lose
I’ll go on
with or without
I’ll go on
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Your poems are absolutely hitting me so hard. I don’t want to over-analyse them (I’ve mentioned that in other feedback on another poem) for these words are pulled deeply from the heart. Any reader will see that. I see – determination, focus, teeth-gritting and an incredible strength. This is a fiercely beautiful piece of writing.
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Thank you Anne. The prompts spoke to me this year.
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Such power, so few words. Your writing is so distilled. I’m deeply moved and grateful.
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JoyceB wrote a new post, #9 use 5 of these words 2 weeks, 2 days ago
firefly, bottle, mask, zoom, treeline, heat, strange, cottage
A firefly
trapped in a bottle
strange sight
in a treelined cottage
far far away from
any civilization
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JoyceB wrote a new post, #8 my choice of a random prompt 2 weeks, 2 days ago
A poem about practice
Practice is important
it makes you better
improving tolerance and ability
repetition is a good teacher
a teacher of increased diligence
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JoyceB wrote a new post, #7 Season 2 weeks, 2 days ago
This season
like no other
Last season
like no other
Holidays barely celebrated
gatherings no happening
Travel limited
for fear of exposure
to unseen germs and microbes
causing illness and death
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JoyceB and
Ingrid are now friends 2 weeks, 3 days ago -
JoyceB wrote a new post, #6 (2pm) Write about your ideal day 2 weeks, 3 days ago
wake up 7am is good
stretch
shower- cause I need to tame my mane
get dressed
breakast… no, let’s go out to eat.
I miss this since mid March2020 quarantine time.
Yes, 2 pancakes, 2 eggs over […]
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