I’m ▇▇ afraid of being used by others
to ▇▇▇▇▇▇▇▇▇▇▇
▇ become better for knowing me
▇▇ the leaving that follows
▇▇ haunts me ▇▇▇▇▇
the rejection after I’ve been drained
of all I had ▇▇▇▇
I get it
loving ▇▇▇▇▇▇ enough angst
to build a compelling character
over and over again
take ▇▇ my floating ribs
▇▇▇▇ teeth and eyelashes
break off pieces of melancholy
slivers of mania
I’ll be your ▇▇▇▇ Venus de Milo
if you only ▇▇▇▇
▇ worship the empty spaces
of my phantom limbs
while I like this poem (& I think Venus de Milo a super clever choice for a redacting poem) I don’t think you’ve been bold enough with you redaction … you’ve taken out meh words … love you to be braver & take out more important words
aka:
worship the empty spaces
of my ▇▇▇▇ limbs
really make your readers work … I think it’s quite a shocking & powerful way to end the poem [But it’s cool if you don’t, it’s your poem after all 🙂 ]
Thanks! I definitely haven’t been writing the pieces for feedback or review. Appreciate your input!