We’d be far out of here
into a better life.
Just picture it.
A sturdy veranda perfect for late-night singalongs.
Waking up & smelling the roses through the pine-sol scented air.
A fenced-in backyard perfect for the tykes.
Between those tv dinners & some good solid sack time,
We’d gather around the tube watching the classics while
making new memories as indelible as those episodes. &
when all was said & done & the sun had tucked itself away
for the evening.
We’d settle into bed knowing we had the most sacrosanct existence in the world.
Somewhere that’s green.
You have a great vocabulary and this poem is very balanced, and sweet, but honest, too.
I like that last line… it calls to mind a fertile, nurturing place where you can have the life you dream of.
Little suggestion… in the last few lines you switch to conditional/past tense. I would change this to future to match the beginning of the poem. I switch tenses frequently without realizing it when I draft 🙂
Sorry, I didn’t notice it until now
I did the same thing in one of mine 🙂