Delicate Brutality
You breathe purpose into this broken heart. Your love is healing it is in my blood. I can feel you in the air tonight. You shook me up electrified woke me up my restless heart beats only for you. Save me from this restlessness. Help me from this hopeless desire. Every breath you take is love breathing air into my lungs. Your love is infectious like a viral coming over, I feel it with an aching desire to get to know you more. You planted roses and now I am breathing just fine. I become one with the thorns, I ignite in your passion.
I am love, I am delicate brutality. -Janice Raquela Mendonca
img Alisa Olaivar
Interesting whatever the source of your serenity, a person or nature or even your inner self.
the song <3
First, to show that you are using someone else’s lyrics (from the song), you might want to write the song lyrics so they differ from your own words.
Your last line punches: “I am delicate brutality”
reveals the pain and pleasure of love, doesn’t it?
These lines: “Love is all around // I feel it in my recess // I feel it in my bones” are not as strong as the rest of your poem. It feels less sincere, less heartfelt.
Less sincere, less heartfelt — and too familiar, not uniquely you.