Dream
i dreamed about you again
but this time you were a cloud
i admired for hours
fixed so solidly in the clear blue sky
you looked like a cotton ball
at first and i thought of all the ways
i’d hold you
between my fingers
stuffed into my ears
wrapped in plastic between my legs
i thought if i spun you
and turned you into thread
that i could wear you draped around my shoulders
tucked into my jeans
and you could be my favorite t-shirt
but i didn’t want to change you’so there i stood
feet glued to the ground
eyes fixed on your perfect irregular form
against a perfect blue sky
and i realized it didn’t matter
what package you came in
i’d still love you anyway
Your personification ran wild and I love it.
Thanks so much Ofuma. Glad you enjoyed it!
I love this! I am a cloud person and can be staring up at those heavenly shapes for hours! I love the movement of the poem and content. I loved the imagery of how you might want to change your boyfried/husband cloud by turning him it into a thread and a t-shirt but then decided that t didn’t matter what package he came in-you’destill love him anyways. Gorgeous poem ripe with imagery. I also love your use of oxymornon…perfectly irregular <3
Awesome!
Thanks Ingrid. Thank God for good imagination! Now if only I get to be in love like this again! š Thanks for reading my friend.
“your perfect irregular form”
I love this phrase. All the ways you describe closeness and comfort have a very down-to-earth quality, tactile and alive. You pulled me in. Thank you!
Thanks for reading waldomaui. If it pulled you in than mission accomplished! Peace my friend.
I love this! Such surprising turns!
A few twists and turns are good. Thanks for reading!
The sensory awareness layered through this poem is delicious – tempered gently by such a sense of love, longing and connection with the person you are thinking of. This is beautiful work, Carolyn xx
Beautiful. One of the best things I have read in a long time.
Stunning imagery! Magical!
This is fresh! Dreaming of clouds resulted in some interesting images. Nice!
This is incredible. So layered. Fun yet serious. Excellent use of imgry. This is my favourite part:
“you looked like a cotton ball
at first and i thought of all the ways
iād hold you
between my fingers
stuffed into my ears”
Oh, I love clouds!!! But that’s not the only reason I love this poem. Every line of this drips with imagery and sensory details… thank you for writing this poem!!
Excellent metaphor for love unbound. Well done!
Love, love, love this poem! The message/theme is so powerful. I am a teacher of middle school students and this is the type of poem I would love to share with them.
Stunning!!
Intriguing!!!!
Every line has something interesting to tell.
I just love it.