You and I Together
You and I together
working as a team.
Over rugged mountains,
across raging streams.
Working as a team
through dark valleys of despair.
Across raging streams,
life’s bridges we repair.
Through dark valleys of despair
our love light shines the way.
Life’s bridges we repair, so,
permanently they can stay.
Our love light shines the way, for
hopes and dreams, joys and triumphs.
So, permanently they cans stay, for
you and I together.
Love this!
Thank you Addy. This was a difficult one to write. Wasnt sure if some of the lines fit.
Oliver
Thank you Addy. Glad you liked this. Of all 12 poems this was the hardest to write. I struggled a bit with this one.
Oliver,
I can definitely see a bit of the struggle through the repetitive verses but that’s the beauty of poetry. You can take any of the poems you’ve created and continue to tweak until they’re no longer recognizable as the original. That’s what I love so much about art.
Plus the fact that everyone’s interpretation will differ to some degree. I especially loved the first two verses in this poem and the concept of “love’s light shining the way.” Such a beautiful and simple description.
Addy,
You are right. I had written one other Pantoum which actually worked out pretty well. It wasnt so much with the actual moving the lines as is done in a Pantoum but making sure the words fit the flow. the love’s light line is one of my favorites as well
This was so serene and sure of its wording in the pantoum structure.
Thank you Melneet