violent submersion
eyes wide and arms outstretched
in the midst of thrashing and trying to catch your breath
a clear vision
an agonizing realization
you played a part
and refused to see this is how it would end
it happened slowly and played itself out
as you looked away
and here you are
taking your last breath
do you choose to fade away
or to fight for a life half lived
By: KMH 2015
Yes! I love it.
I like it. It works in a literal drowning in water way, but also in a metaphorical sense–drowning in a situation of your own creation. Nice start!
Thanks! I was commenting on what is currently going on in society, and how we choose to look away and pretend nothing is happening. I never share my writing, because I’m a perfectionist, so this is a nice opportunity for me.