Whirl and whirl it goes
The clock keeps ticking
My heart keeps beating.
Whirl and whirl it goes
I wish I could hold it
I wish I could stop it
Whirl and whirl it goes
My head keeps thinking
My eyelids keep blinking
Whirl and whirl it goes
I wish I could hold it
I wish I could stop it
Whirl and whirl it goes
I keep strategizing
I keep deliberating
Whirl and whirl it goes
I wish I could hold it
I wish I could stop it
Life keeps happening
Life keeps moving
I wish I could hold it
I wish I could stop it
Whirl and whirl..and whirl and whirl it goes!
I really enjoyed reading, “Whirl.” There is a lot of movement in this poem-no pun intended. Great use of many poetic devices…metaphor, rhyme and rhyming couplet. I love the repetition of certain ideas and lines for emphasis. I would just make one suggestion…revers lines..”.I wish I could stop it” I”I wish I could hold it”…We hold time before we stop it. Reverse the lines and the flow is better… Fun and thought provoking poem!
Thank you so very much, Ingrid
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