The first time that I saw moonlight
I was awe-
Spread out before me
on a black watery cloth,
lay jewels of sparkling Light.!
I was amazed
by the bright light
cast by the climbing moon
and mesmerized by the watery Lake,
turned molten black.
created a void
My Canoe Companion
carried a spare flashlight in hand,
While I wore my headlamp attached to
The brim of my cap.
We paddled in silence-
Enjoying our companionship and
the silence of the lake-
silence only broken by
the occasional cry of a nearby loon-
a true symbol of summertime on a northern lake!
We continued to paddle in silence-
highlighted by the glow of the moon
Surrounded and swaddled
by the nearby canopy
Of birch and cedar tress,
My canoe companion and I.
Ingrid Exner, 2016
5 thoughts on “Poem #12- Final Poem Half Marathon 2016 by Ingrid Exner-“ My Canoe Companion and I””
Very nice Ingrid. I love the line
created a void
Suggestion – keep all Of in small casing to leave the soft impact
Thank you for this constructive comment Vijaya- agreed, lower caps…thank you…I was also thinking of changing this poem a bit more…adding more alliteration in places and maybe editing with more but soft rhetorical devices. Thanks again!
very nice description of the moon on the water. A bonus to enjoy the trip.
You might consider marking the verses more clearly because they have completrness in selves;
What is a watery lake? There are dry lakes….
I agree with the caps- you may want to look at the other poems and adjust. But a stunning poem either way. ❤️